"Fuck yeah, I was scared, but it was the good kind of scared that makes you fearless."
One of my favorite things about your writing are gems like that.
I like the historical fiction/ use of real life characters in the story, Art Pillsbury in chapter 2 for example. When reading, I often get intrigued by such references, "chasing rabbits " I call it and veer off into other areas. A bad habit maybe.
I find the flow a bit choppy, but I can get used to that.
I like how occasionally you will remind the reader that you're in the bar listening to Journey tell his story.
"Fuck yeah, I was scared, but it was the good kind of scared that makes you fearless."
One of my favorite things about your writing are gems like that.
I like the historical fiction/ use of real life characters in the story, Art Pillsbury in chapter 2 for example. When reading, I often get intrigued by such references, "chasing rabbits " I call it and veer off into other areas. A bad habit maybe.
I find the flow a bit choppy, but I can get used to that.
I like how occasionally you will remind the reader that you're in the bar listening to Journey tell his story.
I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Keith, thank you so much. I am endeavoring to fix that choppiness you mentioned. I appreciate you reading and hope life is good down your way.